Some people think that the only way to judge someone's success in business is by the amount of money they make. Is money a true indicator of the success of a business? In what other ways could success in a business be measured?
Many people make a great deal of endeavour to succeed in business. According to some people, the only way to examine people's business success is by the amount of money they earn. However, I hold a contrary view as I believe money is not truly a factor indicating the success of a business. And, success in a business can be gauged by, for example, its employee happiness and contribution to the society. First of all, money is not a true indicator of the success of a business. Although making profits is vital to a company's standing, a company solely making money could not sustain itself for long. A company's sustainability depends not only on the money they make, but depends on the internal level of satisfaction of the employees. Some companies overly exploit their worker, resulting in some mental issues in the workers, such as anxiety and depression. Ultimately, with the accumulation of complaints and negativity in the organisation, employees may go on a strike or overthrow the organisation by all sorts of approaches such as filing a lawsuit, which is fatal for a company's existence. Secondly, a company's contribution to the society should also be taken into account when assessing the value of a company. If a company often donate some assets to the charity, especially during catastrophes or when there are some arising social problems, there would be a wide range of news coverage about this company demonstrating the company's sense of social responsibility , which consequently may immensely enhance a company's reputation in the society. Additionally, people would feel very grateful, thankful and respectful for this company, and would probably purchase more services from this company when admiring and appreciating this company. This would in turn boost the sales of the company which lead to even more economic success. In conclusion, success in a business could not be soley dependent on the profit they generate, but could be measured in plenty of ways such as the sense of satisfaction of the employees and a company's contribution to the society.
- Nowadays more and more jobs and tasks which involve hard physical work are done by machines Do the positive effects of this trend outweigh the negative effects 89
- Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems Discuss both views and gi 89
- Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve Others however believe that these problems cannot be solved if individuals do not take actions Discuss both views and give your own opinion 78
- Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance Discuss both views and give your opinion 84
- Some people claim that newspaper is the best way to get the latest information because it has more influence than other forms of media To what extent do you agree or disagree 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1473, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06744868035 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9985633166 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521994134897 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.306744541 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.428571429 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317775695431 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133680168319 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135585988824 0.0667982634062 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.317775695431 0.151304729494 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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