The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the text, because the enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. But assumption might be incorrect for a couple of reasons.
Firstly, the author states the data used to project the number of enrollments will double is based on current trends. Projections are made for us to have an idea of what could happen in the future, however 50 years a is considerably long time and there is no evidence in the text that could point that the trend would remain constant during this large amount of years. So, there is a chance that the trend will change 5 years or 10 years from now.
Secondly, the author uses the premise that since the average rent for an apartment in town is rising in recent years, students would find difficult to afford off-campus housing. This assumption does not take into consideration the economic condition of the students. It is not clear if the students would not be able afford off-campus housing. Also, there is a chance that the recent increase on the rents might stop in the next few years, making living off-campus an option.
And finally, the conclusion is that the new dormitories would make students more likely to enroll at Buckingham. This could be a strong argument since accommodation an important variable during the academic life. This could a decision point if a student is torn between two colleges that have similar characteristics but it is definitely not a big remark about a college, since the main strengths of a college would be the college's reputation, the quality of the professors, how developed the laboratories are, the structure of the campus or what are the outside class activities the institution could offer.
The argument as it stands now, it is flawed. More evidence should be given to evaluate the argument more effectively. Since a lot of variables were not taken into consideration, like the cost to build these new dormitories.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t trends. Projections are made for us to have an idea of what could happen in the...
^^
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... happen in the future, however 50 years a is considerably long time and there is ...
^
Line 7, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...ain strengths of a college would be the colleges reputation, the quality of the professo...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91788856305 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76222673648 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530791788856 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.6377392071 57.8364921388 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.8 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19558906475 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634019817242 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917185344986 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111694769131 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853076414232 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t trends. Projections are made for us to have an idea of what could happen in the...
^^
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... happen in the future, however 50 years a is considerably long time and there is ...
^
Line 7, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...ain strengths of a college would be the colleges reputation, the quality of the professo...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91788856305 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76222673648 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530791788856 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.6377392071 57.8364921388 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.8 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19558906475 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634019817242 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917185344986 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111694769131 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853076414232 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.