people should do that they have to do
There are a controversial opinion about how nowadays people spend time. Some argue that most of the time new generations are getting pleasure experiences, while others point that they should be focused on regular obligations. In my opinion, agree with the latter for several reasons that I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, new technologies, such as laptops, smart televisions, and cellphones has been changing the human behavior. It is true that those new technologies have a lot of benefits in different areas. For example, universities, industries, and marketplace with endless applications. However, it is totally true as well that it is easy for people to use them in wrong way. For example, a person who is focused on his or her computer screen, sometimes they feel annoying and they start to look for something in browser, and instead they being focus in working, they find some distraction on the network.
Furthermore, the human being is not prepared to use all their effort in an specific target or task for many hours. In addition, they tend to procrastinate in most of cases. In others word, all the time they prefer avoiding hard responsibilities, looking for something less stressful and more comfortable. For instance, the time average of degree students at universities is around ten years, while it should take them not more than six years. There are some surveys from named universities supporting the idea that students have struggles with concentration. Thus, they prefer to play some video game or watch a movie, before their responsibilities.
In conclusion, when people should do that they must to do, there is a boycott for new technologies combined with human behavior stimulating them in the wrong way , and they continuously are trying to avoid their responsibilities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: a
...not prepared to use all their effort in an specific target or task for many hours....
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the cases') or simply say ''most cases''.
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Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
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...ing to avoid their responsibilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19932432432 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10797574019 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5488984069 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258658059079 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704523263284 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089708126016 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173073043425 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119763269973 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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