Some people think that famous people’s support towards international aid organizations while others think that celebrities makes the problems less important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Some people argue that well known people by donating money for charity groups can make the issues more relevant while opposite thinking is shown by others. In my opinion, I tend towards to the beneficial that celebrities would bring for these organizations because of their popularity.
It is understandable why several people believe that celebrities cannot use their fame to increase the attention globally. First of all, the media which follows them frequently may only focus on the life and scandal without delivering detail charity day’s information. For example, in my country, a lot of singers do the donating events for international aid organizations. However, the paparazzi usually find the negative story that they have encountered in the past in order to level down their reputation as well as the significance of the meaningful activity. Secondly, there may be a group of people who dislike a particular famous person. As a result, if those popular people support aid organizations, they will put off charity groups.
On the other hand, positive intention will certainly help well known people bring the problems closely to everyone. This means they are able to reach more and more global identity. Taking Roger Federer, who is a successful tennis player in the world, as an example, he goes to the African UNICEF annually to raise money for essential infrastructure and provide free meals. His action has been recognized widely towards keeping attention to kid’s life. Moreover, such familiar voice from famous people would give better influence than anyone else. Therefore, this highly wonderful jobs would get in people’s mind easily.
In conclusion, no matter how that popular person is, they would make the issues of supporting global aid groups urgently.
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... supporting global aid groups urgently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30633802817 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78466368079 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665492957746 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2810658159 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.466666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249000350962 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715264787545 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583948085564 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142037581853 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631590082084 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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