The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
commuters are facing traffic jam at rush hours on Blue Highway which connects city and suburbs by almost doubled their time and to resolve this problem the suggestion of adding lane bicycle lane will encourage commuters to ride bicycle and atomatically will reduce the traffic jam at rush hours was given. As adding one more lane was followed by worsening traffic jams at nearby Green Highway. However the argument is rife with assumptions and does not sound convincing due to lack of evidence
Commuters are complaining about doubling of commuting time at rush hours on Blue Highway. Considering it a major probblem , is any survey or study has been conducted on it yet ? what exactly is root cause of this problem ? Is there any specific reason why traffic gets jam at rush hours ? Does people follows all traffic rules at rush hours? the traffic is coming or going in any perticular direction causing traffic jam ? these things need to be considered before taking any further decision.
last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Even though it has worsen the traffic the reasons behind increase in traffic jam can be varied. traffic jams can happen due to accidents also due to stopping or not working of a single car can also affect the traffic. Also is any study has been conducted on Green Highway stating the traffic has worsen? Addition to this the situation of traffic from last year can be completly changed this year. Along with that comparision between Green and Blue Highway may not be appropriate as both Highway can have different traffic rush hours, location, locality ,length and space also geographical featurs which needs to be considered and which can be far different then Blue Highway as of Green Highway.
To reduce traffic the suggestion of adding bicycles track is given as many bicyclists are resident in nearby area. By encouraging bicyclist to use bicycle will reduce traffic in rush hours is assumed. this assumpthion is weak and does not consider many aspects of it. any pole has been taken to know exact number od bicyclist ? also, does people really consider using bicycle in day to day life ? specially at rush hours ? also any evidance or proof about exact number of bicycle residents who uses Blue Highway on daily basis needs to be confirmed.
therefore due to lack of evidence and inadiquate data this is very weak argument and writer should reconsider the following points for better implimentation to solve traffic jam problem at Blue Highway.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 2079 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.812 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.461 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.044 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Commuters
commuters are facing traffic jam at rush hours on...
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Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t doubled their time and to resolve this problem the suggestion of adding lane bi...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he traffic jam at rush hours was given. As adding one more lane was followed by wo...
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Line 1, column 396, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...g traffic jams at nearby Green Highway. However the argument is rife with assumptions a...
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Line 1, column 495, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sound convincing due to lack of evidence Commuters are complaining about doubling...
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Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...Highway. Considering it a major probblem , is any survey or study has been conduct...
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Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: What
...or study has been conducted on it yet ? what exactly is root cause of this problem ?...
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Suggestion: The
...ollows all traffic rules at rush hours? the traffic is coming or going in any perti...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: These
...ticular direction causing traffic jam ? these things need to be considered before tak...
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Suggestion: Last
...ed before taking any further decision. last years addition of a lane to the nearby ...
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Line 4, column 6, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...fore taking any further decision. last years addition of a lane to the nearby Green ...
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Line 4, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Even though it has worsen the traffic the reasons b...
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Line 4, column 128, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
... traffic jams on it. Even though it has worsen the traffic the reasons behind increase...
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Line 4, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Traffic
... increase in traffic jam can be varied. traffic jams can happen due to accidents also d...
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Line 4, column 327, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...single car can also affect the traffic. Also is any study has been conducted on Gree...
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Line 4, column 405, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
...n Green Highway stating the traffic has worsen? Addition to this the situation of traf...
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Line 4, column 661, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t traffic rush hours, location, locality ,length and space also geographical featu...
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Line 4, column 766, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...nsidered and which can be far different then Blue Highway as of Green Highway. To r...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...educe traffic in rush hours is assumed. this assumpthion is weak and does not consid...
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Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Also
...ken to know exact number od bicyclist ? also, does people really consider using bicy...
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Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Specially
...ider using bicycle in day to day life ? specially at rush hours ? also any evidance or pr...
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Suggestion: Also
...to day life ? specially at rush hours ? also any evidance or proof about exact numbe...
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Line 5, column 423, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...to day life ? specially at rush hours ? also any evidance or proof about exact numbe...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
... on daily basis needs to be confirmed. therefore due to lack of evidence and inadiquate ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: therefore,
... on daily basis needs to be confirmed. therefore due to lack of evidence and inadiquate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90277777778 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5180792562 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472222222222 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 71.6688720518 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0869565217 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7826086957 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21739130435 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254951492542 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764811294873 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756876014297 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152361701813 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690009690271 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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