Some People say that music is a way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some People say that, music is a way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Hilla2020 on Mon, 09/21/2020 - 12:52

Myriads of people believe that music is an avenue where different cultures and age group unite. I vehemently agree with that songs unite different age groups and cultural groups because, music acts as a communication channel between different people and culture, moreso, it is also dynamic in nature.

To begin, music serves as a communication channel. It is an acceptable fact that people can express their emotions through the lyrics, rhythms, beats and tone of a song. This emotions could be excitement, love, sorrow, and mourning. Interestingly, it is well known fact that most music performed during ceremonies such as weddings, traditional marriages and even funerals depict the essence of the occasion. For instance, according to Indians Times news paper, Sunita majap, a popular Indian musician performed a dirge during her mother's cremation, and non native Indians speakers could easily detect the message behind the song even without understanding the language. This example shows that music is a way of transmitting information between people and different cultural groups.

Furthermore, music is dynamic in nature, there are various kinds of melodies namely, hipop, Afro beats cultural and traditional songs. All these unites people of different age grades and cultures. For examples, I recently asked my younger cousin why she prefer to club on Friday night, he posited that he loves hip_ pop hence, he meets young ones from different cultures who are in his category.

In conclusion, according to some people, music is medium by which people and cultures are united. Although, there might be differing opinions however, I strongly believe that music brings individuals from various cultures and ages together because it is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and emotions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... age groups and cultural groups because, music acts as a communication channel be...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...ics, rhythms, beats and tone of a song. This emotions could be excitement, love, sor...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tions could be excitement, love, sorrow, and mourning. Interestingly, it is well ...
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Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... even funerals depict the essence of the occasion. For instance, according to In...
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Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he occasion. For instance, according to Indians Times news paper, Sunita majap, ...
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Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
...r instance, according to Indians Times news paper, Sunita majap, a popular Indian musicia...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...ecently asked my younger cousin why she prefer to club on Friday night, he posited tha...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sion, according to some people, music is medium by which people and cultures are ...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: a
...is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and e...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: a; a
...is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37152777778 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75609374995 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607638888889 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8658614322 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31868265647 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121059200354 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095711214691 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20389380438 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731004860424 0.056905535591 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... age groups and cultural groups because, music acts as a communication channel be...
^^
Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...ics, rhythms, beats and tone of a song. This emotions could be excitement, love, sor...
^^^^
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tions could be excitement, love, sorrow, and mourning. Interestingly, it is well ...
^^
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... even funerals depict the essence of the occasion. For instance, according to In...
^^
Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he occasion. For instance, according to Indians Times news paper, Sunita majap, ...
^^
Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: NEWS_PAPER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newspaper'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: newspaper
...r instance, according to Indians Times news paper, Sunita majap, a popular Indian musicia...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...ecently asked my younger cousin why she prefer to club on Friday night, he posited tha...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sion, according to some people, music is medium by which people and cultures are ...
^^
Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: a
...is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and e...
^^^
Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and...
^
Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: a; a
...is dynamic in nature and it also serves a a channel of communicating feelings and e...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37152777778 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75609374995 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607638888889 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8658614322 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31868265647 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121059200354 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095711214691 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20389380438 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731004860424 0.056905535591 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.