Some people think that older children should be required to take care of younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which do you prefer?
Nowadays, more families are inclined to have more than one child due to the psychological recommendation about negative effects of being only child on children. On other hand, these days, due to financially supporting the family, both mother and father have to work, so they do not have enough time to take care of their younger children. Although some people believe that older children should take on responsibility for taking care of their siblings, others have an opposite conviction. I personally think that involving older children in process of taking care of their siblings is a good idea and they benefit from it. In the following paragraphs, I will shed light on my rationales.
The first reason that comes to my mind is that cooperating in looking after siblings gives older children an opportunity to gain insight into the meaning of responsibility which is so helpful in their future life. Moreover, this enjoyable experience leads to cultivating their confidence and stimulating their autonomy, both of which are pivotal factors in ones' success in their future life. According to the study conducted in a distinguished university, children who have the responsibility for taking care of younger siblings are of more tendency to participate in social activities, also if they choose as a leader of a group they confidently will do a burden of responsibility as a good leader. " It is no doubt that these children are more successful in their future life, particularly in their working life," says Professor Michael, the head of the study.
The second reason that I would like to mention is that children who assist their parents in taking care of their siblings will gain valuable experience which is so worthwhile for their future when they will become a parent. In other words, these children will face fewer difficulties and appropriately deal with the challenges of bringing up a child in the future when they have their own child. Take my experience as a convincing example. Both of my parents worked out of the home for long hours, so I have to take care of my younger sister. Although at first, it was very difficult and stressful, I obtained some valuable experience which helped me in my future private life. I got married early and have to go to another city which was far from my own city to live in. After a short time, I had my own child which I have to look after her lonely. Needless to say, it was not difficult for me to cope with my big responsibility because I had done it before. If I had not looked after my younger sister when I was a teenager, I would have encountered more problems when I became a mother.
To wrap it out, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that if children are asked to look after their younger siblings, not only do their personalities improve through boosting their confidence, but also they become ready for their future role as either a mother or a father. I highly recommend that psychologists encourage parents to shift some of their responsibilities, in looking after younger children, to their older children so that children benefit considerably from advantages of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, second, so, while, no doubt, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2635.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87962962963 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91566120235 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.3541330133 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.75 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23838033565 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810224985403 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716194912134 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165195121663 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084984118696 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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