Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
modern technology has influenced the society in various positive and negative ways. some of the innovated technologies are televisions and the movies. In my opinion, movies and television has more negative effects in the way the young people behave. I feel this way because of some disadvantages that watching movies and television has contributed to the society.
First, the high rate of crimes and violence. The young people have engaged in lots of violences and crimes in the country. they spend lot of times watching horror movies. this creates a negative mindset for such children and they try to display these which they have seen from movies and television by indulging in violent acts. In the recent news published, a young boy of 23 years went to a church in country side of Texas and killed more than twenty of the worshippers in the church. this situation brought a great tragedy in the state and people lost their dear ones.
Second, less productivity is seen on young people who devote most of their times watching the television and movies. For instance, my niece was always found watching the television. he hardly devotes his time to his studies. In his final examination at high school, he came out with a very poor result and this affected his entrance into some top-notch universities.
To sum up, modern technology usage like use of television and watching of movies has created a lot of negative and tragic experiences in the society
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, so, for instance, i feel, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1217.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 247.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92712550607 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65747458221 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558704453441 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5663156401 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1333333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4666666667 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210260221994 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696430794641 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834199328257 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129788512099 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749865971702 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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