one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living
longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Standards of health care for sick people have rised risen considerably in all over the
world in previous recent years and this has had many effects a great effect on how
long people can live. There are many obvious benefits to this but also have many
disadvantages drawbacks. (Disadvantages is correct but I have changed it because
you should paraphrase the words from the question.) I believe that the bad cases these
drawbacks could be more significant than the good benefits.
Firstly, as people are living much longer, there will be more food and water resources
are needed for them to live. When the As people become elderly, they might not help
be able to work for growing food support themselves and this means that they will
burden their family members.(I understand you want to link this to needing more
resources but I don't think it fits because not everyone grows food. You could say
contribute to society) If these elderly peoples the elderly don't have family members
to take care of them, then the government may have to do it. Currently, in my
country, people the public have already complained to the government about too
much money being given to old people and not many people are having babies so we
cannot keep it like this. that due to the declining birth rate, the amount of money
given to the elderly is not sustainable. (The idea is good but I would use better
vocabulary and change the structure.)
Despite these disadvantages, the fact that people can live longer because of better
hospitals and, doctors and general health care, could be a big sizable benefit to
everyone society.
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- one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages 67
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96753246753 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56463092065 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574675324675 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.649803121 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.692307692 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38461538462 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32022030736 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127062097413 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161583825633 0.0667982634062 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923687056654 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121593324859 0.056905535591 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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