knowledge
Ganing knowledge is the most significant factor in shapping one`s future. If I were asked to choose between acquiring deep knowledge about a particular subject or to have a broad knowledge about different domains, I would definetly incline to the idea of having widespread information about multiple subjects. I feel this way for couple of reasons that i will explore in the following paragraphs.
To beging with, studying about various subject will open doors in our career. My personal expirience is a good example for this. Back in 2001 when i started my major in pharmay there were mandatory classes and ellelective classes that we can take in any author faculty. I choose to take micro econemy as an ellective subject which seems to have no thing to do with pharmacy. Ten years later when i began to work in a pharmacy in united state the were so many candidate for pharmacy manager and i was among them. Based on my knowledge of econemy i demonstrated good command of maintaning the right inventory and taking care of the discripancy in every day sales. This extra knowledge was added up to my pharmacy degree and made me different than my other coworkers who are focusing only on medications domain.
Second, gaining knowledge about broad subjects can help us in a difficult situations. For instance, my father was a teacher, but he always liked to study about sociology. Eventhough he spent most fof his life in classrooms, he was always aware of the emergent problems in our society . One day he felt that his salary was not enouh to cover our big familiy expenses and he decided to have an extra job .He got a position of consultant in a rdio station that specialized in bringing up communities` problems to the intention of the audiences and the government. So without his knowledge of sociology he would not be able to get this position that helped us a lot financially.
To sum up I think that it`s better to gain knowledge in different domains than being specialized in a particular subject.
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- TOEFL T P O 22 Integrated Writing Task 85
- TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- do you prefer to have knowledge about a variety of subject or about one specific subject and why 76
- knowledge 76
- The extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. 86
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, for instance, i feel, i think, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83045977011 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85436872056 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580459770115 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4596325693 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0625 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240233663256 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882736069366 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102411358117 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177248634146 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723831723045 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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