Nowadays, many older people choose to live in retirement communities rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development?
For the past few years, there has been a significant increase in the number of older people who opt for living in a care home with other people instead of living with their adult children. Although this trend has been seriously criticised as being opposed to our long standing tradition, I strongly argue that it can make a positive contribution to the development of society.
At the outset, living in retirement communities or care homes with people at the same age is highly likely to diminish the possibilities of health problems in older people. Initially, in regard to physical health, are there not only many nurses who take care of older people’ health situations but this retirement community also assists them in creating good habits and offers the best medical facilities. Furthermore, as opposed to living with adult children, being around their friends, old colleagues provides old people chances to talk freely, to share every problem in their life and is less likely to cause disagreements. This definitely can exert a positive impact on older people’ health, increasing their living expectancy.
Furthermore, adult children also benefit from it as they can spend their whole time on their career without worrying about their old parents staying at home.
Moreover, this trend also plays a critical role in the sustainable development of the society, creating a more civilised world for human beings. First and foremost, older people, those who have dedicated their life changing the world, are respected and able to get access to the best living facilities and health services. They are capable of living independently from their children, and having control over the rest of their life. In addition to that, more and more retirement communities are built up, in all likelihood, this will create more job opportunities, contribute to put a curb on the increasing rate of unemployment among young people.
To conclude, in my point of view, I wholeheartedly support this trend as not only old people but also the whole society can reap a lot of benefits from it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, in addition, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11403508772 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78318494962 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.968915675 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.75 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355619896556 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135614229954 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874355106537 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183532974728 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110775395782 0.056905535591 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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