Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In terms of children’s education, in each country, many problems need to be considered carefully to create the best education system for the young generation. The question of whether students should attend culinary courses or not leads to different opinions. While some people suppose that such lessons about food are good for children, others think schools should focus on teaching other important subjects.
On the one hand, two main reasons should be mentioned to explain why some people support the idea of teaching children about food and cooking. Firstly, it is a good chance for students to acknowledge some fundamental information about the food and eating portion so that they know what they should consume every day to ensure better physical and mental development. Indeed, children rarely care about the pros and cons of what they eat, they just eat too much of what they are really into, regularly, which are high sugar such as candy, snacks. This increases the number of children being obese or having decayed teeth. Therefore, when being educated well about the function of each kind of food, children are likely to eat in a more moderated portion. Secondly, it also creates a practical environment for children to enhance life experience which is useful for them when growing up. It makes sense that when they have an independent life, they can take care of themselves and do not have to lie to their parents anymore. Moreover, eating homemade food is also better and cheaper than eating out so it helps them to save money as well.
On the other hand, other people argue that students should spend time learning more important subjects likely because of two reasons. Firstly, scientific subjects like Maths, Physics, Chemistry, and foreign language subjects are useful for them to work or study higher education in the future. For instance, when students want to enroll in a Technology University, they have to pass an exam in Maths, Physics, and Chemistry which require a lot of time and effort to learn during school years. For another example, due to globalization, it is undeniable that workers with competent English skills can get a job with a handsome salary therefore, children should learn English at an early age to adapt to the labor market in the future. Secondly, instead of learning about food at school, students can learn at home from their parents and this helps parents save money paid for this subject’s tuition fee. Moreover, when teaching children to cook at home, parents have a chance to talk and make the relationship with kids more close-knit.
In conclusion, while some advocate prioritizing traditional school curriculums based on academic subjects, I believe imparting knowledge of nutrition and food preparation generates a great sense of independence and develops healthy eating habits for graduates. Thus, courses about food should be added to the school curriculum.
- Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects Discuss both views and give your opinion 67
- Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it Others think students should spend time on important subjects Discuss both views and give your opinion 73
- Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects Discuss both views and give your opinion 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...cation system for the young generation. The question of whether students should attend culinary courses...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 1615.20841683 152% => OK
No of words: 477.0 315.596192385 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14255765199 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61760338035 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 176.041082164 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534591194969 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 506.74238477 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.884298264 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.105263158 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1052631579 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205466272485 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719571416861 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852347000023 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138807647452 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566364790286 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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