Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think students should spend time on important subjects.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
According to some, food science should be integrated in the school syllabus to teach students how to prepare it. However, I believe that attention should be paid on other important subjects for some reasons.
On the one hand, the option to teach students about the science of food is justified to some extent. Acquiring good culinary skills allows them to take control over their lives autonomously. It is prevalent that many adolescent students who live away from their parents struggle to prepare a basic meal for themselves, especially those who have not received parental guidance before embracing the world. Therefore, culinary courses are needed in order to alleviate their diet and avoid health illnesses. As a result, it will offer them a healthier lifestyle to work and study more efficiently.
On the other hand, I believe that these courses should not be compulsory since other subjects play a significant role in their future career. The current academic curriculum is already full of theory-heavy subjects and to cover the most part of them is indeed a challenging task for students, not to mention the exams they have to prepare for each one. Yet, there are some of the mandatory subjects for students who are going to graduate, precisely, these are the key subjects that teachers used to evaluate their overall performance. For instance, Vietnamese students must possess an 8 or above in math to successfully achieve an excellent-level degree. Furthermore, the domain they choose in the future may include career-specific skills and emphasis should be laid on the relevant subjects that allow them to optimize their potential. Hence, they should be held in higher esteem to ensure their academic outcome and career prospects.
To conclude, although culinary courses are important to shape one’s fitness and health, I believe that those should be taken in accordance with students’ willingness and other essential subjects should be high on the agenda.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2523659306 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80617765731 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567823343849 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8994908158 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.928571429 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251750773802 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947423057269 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798686059392 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186448859783 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836100170257 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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