The graph below shows the percentage of people in different age groups in one city who attended music concerts between 2010 and 2015.
The given line graph illustrates how different between the proportion of participants of some music concerts due to their ages in the 5-year period
Overall, individuals in 16-24 years olds were the most common in these music events, while elders who were above 75 years old did not enjoy these kind of shows
These music concerts witnessed the highest surge in the attendance of 16-24 people. Specifically, there were approximately more 30% allocated to these participants to take part in these shows, from 40% in 2010 to 70% in 2015 with sustainable increase. Whereas, these concerts was not the favourite choices of citizens in the ages of 55-64. When the ratio of these people dropped dramatically to around 20% in 2015 after a slight growth in 2011
Otherwise, there was a small similar attitude in people who were in the age of 25-54, as the figure allocated to them both decline about 10% in 2011 . Nonetheless, after that, these shows registered a significant rise in the percentage of 25-44 participants, which reached nearly 25% while the other moderately went up and stay stable as it was in 2010. Nevertheless, above 75 years old elders was the age group that witnessed least participants in these shows, with the percentage beginning with just not over 10% in 2010 then grew up to around 20% through 5 years
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s due to their ages in the 5-year period Overall, individuals in 16-24 years olds...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...o were above 75 years old did not enjoy these kind of shows These music concerts witnes...
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... 70% in 2015 with sustainable increase. Whereas, these concerts was not the favourite c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...0% in 2015 after a slight growth in 2011 Otherwise, there was a small similar att...
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Suggestion: .
...d to them both decline about 10% in 2011 . Nonetheless, after that, these shows re...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en grew up to around 20% through 5 years
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, whereas, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 225.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91555555556 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74072096602 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568888888889 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.8942393756 43.030603864 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.333333333 112.824112599 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.5 22.9334400587 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.23603664747 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240481051954 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104797465163 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481193027726 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143745578793 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522659772312 0.0819641961636 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.2329268293 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.84 61.2550243902 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.