“Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world. Do you agree or disagree?
Currently, education exerts greater impacts on every single aspect of life, which is believed to facilitate the development of the globe. I, along with most mankind, totally lean over the idea that with people’s higher consciousness and the extending employment opportunities thanks to education, global civilizations are deemed to change positively.
Firstly, undeniably, by forming people’s awareness, education aids to low the crime rate creating a safer place to live. Needless to say, education builds seriousness in abiding by laws and makes the consequences visible to most of the residents. It, therefore, guarantees that people can distinguish what they should do or not; as a result, the number of incidents is likely to soak exponentially in a society full of well-trained people. My brother’s committing crime is a typical example to prove the correctness of education on the drastic change in social safety. Legally, students under eighteen years old are not allowed to ride motorbikes. Woefully, my 17 year- old brother who lacked law education decided to ride a motorbike while hanging out with his friends. Consequently, he was fined by the police officer for his illegal acts. From then on, my brother attempted to shield himself from juvenile delinquency.
Secondly, better employment opportunities are exerted owing to education. When people apply for a job, they have to compete with hundreds of other candidates for a vacant position. The lower the education level is, the greater the number of people applying for the same low-paid jobs is. Nevertheless, with the proper qualifications or educational background, there are more qualified jobs to be considered by employees, which in turn support the government in successfully controlling the influence of the unemployment rate on the growth of a country.
In conclusion, people recognize the importance of education in this day and age because it brings back more employment opportunities; furthermore, it widens people’s knowledge of social information.
- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future 76
- Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts in the work Do you agree or disagree 89
- The diagrams show changes in a student common room
- The maps give information about a university sports court 73
- The maps give information about a university sports court 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49363057325 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21337579618 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.640127388535 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9498187863 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11440432444 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345995562218 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.028805472074 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637626041825 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284110257111 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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