In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
The origin of the word “hero” derives from the mythical Greek character called Heracles. Son of Zeus, the so-called utmost god of the world, half-deified and half-human, he descends down from the sky, being audacious enough to save the seductive world. Similarly, we regard ‘heroes’ as the ones who dare to sacrifice their own lives to solve disasters and make the world come back to a peaceful state. The statement suggests that in the contemporary era no one can be regarded as heroes anymore because of the emerge and dissemination of media. However, if we look around our surroundings and the social demands, we might likely to find various figures who are labelled heroes of our time.
Admittedly, unlike the ancient and catholic times in history, we no longer venerate celestial or religious characters like gods or goddesses without any logical doubt. Even not until the end of 19th century have we entirely discarded a wholly christian belief when Friedrich Nietzsche contended that God has finally died(Got ist Tod). Although there are still a significant number of people who believe in certain religions, the sphere of the religious is strictly discerned to the sphere of everyday, social and political life. Similarly, unlike during the war time, heroic figures who are deemed as our protector and savior is no longer available either. The media shows every details of the gossips or daily routine of those idolized figures, so that they cannot be as arcane as they were before the time of mass media.
However, yet we can easily imagine a few political figures or celebrities who are deemed as the most popular and amenable person of our time. These aren’t called Heroes per se, but once if we look at their social function, we might realize that the public somehow depend on and show full respect towards them. For example, let us look into the world of entertainment in which there are numerous singers, actors and entertainers who are deemed as the Idols of our time. BTS, a well-known K-pop group has gained its popularity so as to be regarded the heroes that saved the Korean culture. Citizens of Korea admire their images, their songs and their existence due to their hard work to advertise the Korean cultures throughout the world.
Furthermore, we can also think about everyday routine figures who can be regarded as heroes. Then and now, there has been copious articles which have illustrated certain citizens who tried to sacrifice themselves in order to save other groups of person in times of disasters. For example, when the terrible 9-11 disaster had happened in 2001, numerous unidentified figures showed up in the live-streamed news broadcasting who went into the building in order to save people who were stuck. Therefore, even if these are not as known as the popular heroes of our time, we cannot doubt that their actions can be called heroic.
In conclusion, as long as there are still heroic actions that are trying to make the world at least an inch better than before, we can not assume that the existence of heroes is not possible anymore. Even right now, there might be numerous small heroes who sacrifice their lives taking care of their loved ones.
- The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them not by their contemporaries 83
- Claim the best way to understand a character of a society is to examine the character of the man and woman that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models Reason Heroes and role models reveal a society s highest ideals 83
- It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves 75
- People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences 83
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: DESCEND_DOWN[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'descends'.
Suggestion: descends
... world, half-deified and half-human, he descends down from the sky, being audacious enough to...
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Line 1, column 507, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e regarded as heroes anymore because of the emerge and dissemination of media. However, if...
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Line 2, column 492, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... is strictly discerned to the sphere of everyday, social and political life. Similarly, ...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...n K-pop group has gained its popularity so as to be regarded the heroes that saved the K...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, well, as to, at least, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2661.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92777777778 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.563601799 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52962962963 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 849.6 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3801213851 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.714285714 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12510807504 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420596024066 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382148553979 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771564299356 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257595050201 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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