Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As technology advanced, developments such as movies and television have emerged. While some may say that such development is beneficial for young people because it provides them a certain amount of entertainment, I believe it has several downsides for young people. The reason to why I believe in such way will be elaborated in more First of all, young people are susceptible to getting addicted to movies and television. Because young people are still in the process of developing resistance to attractions, they get compelled easily to things that provide them entertainment. While some might question why is this a wrong thing, the effect could be quite detrimental because it interferes with their development in social skills. Honing social ability is a cumbersome process because they have to learn how to effectively communicate and build a relationship with other people through multiple failures and success. Because it is painstaking, children who have been exposed to the magical world presented in the movies and television, where everything seems perfect, they tend to turn their backs on the outside reality. As time passes, they would gradually give up in making friends and would rather watch movies and television, leading them to becoming a potatoe couch even when they are old.
Furthermore, movies and television may contain inappropriate elements such as violence and drug use, which may affect the development of young people in a negative way. Similar to the reason mentioned above, young people have not fully developed their perspective and are flexible to accepting new ideas. Watching movies and television would increase the possibility for them to be exposed to inappropriate contents, causing them to think that it is okay to behave in such way. It has been scientifically proven that children who have been exposed to contents that contain violence and drug use tend to be more aggressive and have a potential of being addicted to drugs as they get older without acknowledging that it is a wrong behavior to pursue.
To sum up, movies and television can compel children to get addicted to it, inhibiting them from developing social skill, and providing wrong ideas to pursue certain behaviors that are not accepatable. Due to such reasons, I believe that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects to young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... affect the development of young people in a negative way. Similar to the reason mentioned above,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, still, while, as to, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20365535248 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88947958936 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496083550914 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.0827658748 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.357142857 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3571428571 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254903076469 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104835545008 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871059328853 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200159008228 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356520163544 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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