It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
In the future, it is predicted that the number of elderly people will overtake that of young people in many countries. In my opinion, this is likely to be a negative trend and I will explain my belief in this essay.
To begin with, the lack of workforce would be a serious issue that countries with old population have to face. In this era, there are many industries, such as mining, that require a tremendous number of workers. In addition, these jobs tend to demand physical fitness, as well as long working hours, which are mostly suitable to young workers only. As a result, a decrease in the rate of young age group would hinder the development of the important industries, consequently damaging the economic expansion of the whole nation.
Furthermore, an old population can also cause financial problems to the government. This is because the government have to increase their spending on social welfare, which pays retired workers their pensions. Moreover, the costs of disease treatment and health care also arises along with the rise of the percentage of elderly citizens. Except for some countries which have already had large economy, most countries would not be able to address these expenses.
Lastly, it is widely believed that this trend seems to be irreversible. Many families could be reluctant to have many children since they have to take care of old parents, which is rather time-consuming. Consequently, the proportion of young people is likely to keep falling over the years, worsening the problem.
All in all, it can be seen that the country’s economic growth will probably suffer if the percentage of younger people drops. Thus, I hold a firm belief that it would be a negative development that a country have more elderly people than young adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more elderly people than young adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, lastly, moreover, so, thus, well, except for, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98322147651 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71476510067 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553691275168 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.1418033019 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271506653021 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888302524303 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880862331451 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166982016486 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954980672304 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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