Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views.
That children ought to be encouraged to raise the competition sense is often believed by some while others think that instead of competing, children should cooperate to be more helpful people when growing up. From my perspective, both arguments have validity but I would take a much favourable view of the latter.
The sense of competition which is improved during the age of children could bring them some assets. Competition among children in an educational environment could make better progress in their academic record. When students in the same class compete together to get the first rank, the desire and motivation to obtain achievements could be easily enhanced. As a result, it makes children more dedicated to their work, which gradually creates the personality of a successful adult. Furthermore, a sense of self-awareness could be raised in children because, during competition, people could explore their strengths and improve their self-confidence.
On the other hand, cooperation is considered to be more important than competition in children raising for some reasons. Because people could not survive without a community, cooperating among children could help build and strengthen the relationships with their friends and the people around them. Cooperation is also one of the most essential qualifications in teamwork activities. For example, when children participate in a football match which is a kind of collaborative sport, they could reinforce the relationship and unity among their team players, which enhances the skills of working colleagues and living in harmony in the society.
Although competition and cooperation in children teaching are both important, they ought to be taught to work collaboratively. This is not only beneficial during childhood but also essential in building necessary skills for children to become helpful adults. In my opinion, both parents and educators should pay more attention to encourage children to cooperate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, while, for example, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56622516556 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09955176994 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569536423841 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3597842083 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.071428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412040401408 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146454430394 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113235493226 0.0667982634062 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271789753526 0.151304729494 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843852297391 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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