Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Dr. Field concluded based on his observations that the children were being reared by the whole community.
These conclusion is flawed based on the fact that it failed to access the actual condition of the people in the village. Perhaps he conducted his observations in a period in which the village is celebrating a major festival which gives every child the opportunity to dine, chat, and relate intimately with every adult in the village as if they were the children's guardian. He should have conducted a survey along with his observation to know how well related the children were to other members of the village.
Dr. Karp conducted an interview-question method and concluded the children were reared by their biological parents because they mentioned them more than they named other adults. This is a baseless conclusion because it's natural that the biological bond between parents and offspring will naturally trigger a child to mention their parents even if they were not the ones that reared them. This is very possible especially since they were living in the same village. They have access to their parent's house, they can visit them ones in a while and go back to the people that rear them. If this is the case, then the parental bond would trigger the children to mention their biological parents than they do their rearers.
The anthropologists acceptance of the child-interview method because of Dr.Karp's theory is understandable because they thought it brought better result compared to Dr. Karl. But why they failed to consider the time lapse. Dr. Field conducted his observation 20 years ago, so the conditions of the village must have changed and the children 20years ago would have become adult by now. If the interview question system were used twenty years ago, it's possible that different inference would have been drawn.
In taking a particular method as standard, the difference in time frame and condition of the people must be considered. Dr. Karl should have employed observation method, survey method together with his interview question method. Combining the three methods would have yielded a more reliable result.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1769 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.011 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.687 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.28 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10511363636 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71287481462 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485795454545 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5369604844 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3125 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.875 5.70786347227 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222850675101 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792007284715 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790300319189 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150410888865 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081853439434 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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