Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In today's modern world, with the development of technology, most people use social media and different TV channels to get information about events that happen every day around the world. It helps them be aware of the news every moment. From my vantage point, it is better to know about events around the world because being aware of our surroundings will provide a better life. I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First of all, be aware of what happens every day worldwide increases our data about various things. In today's complex life, we should make update our information in different fields. One of the benefits of knowing about global events is that it increases our knowledge about society, politics, business, else. We can find new methods used in progressive countries and update our knowledge and use it in our careers. For example, most of the time, I search the internet and look for new technology, methods, and materials used in architecture companies worldwide, and I learn a lot of new things for my work.
Second, being aware of our world's news is necessary for challenging conditions. Many people in a country need help after an earthquake, particular epidemic disease, or even war. Other countries can probably help them by sending food or first aid. If we can get detailed information through the media, we will help in more effective ways. We can collect what they require more and do not send unnecessary things. For example what we can know about whether they need more clothes or which kind of food is they need more. For example, three years ago, an earthquake happened in a city in our country they needed blanket and steam because the weather was cold there. Most of the people send them food, but they require more sanitary things.
In conclusion, from my point of view, knowing about events around the world has benefits for us. First, we can increase our data about different fields and use it in our work in this way. Second, in a challenging condition, we can get detailed information about the incident and help more effectively.
- Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon On the other hand conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would be impossible 76
- Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays 73
- because people are busy doing so many different things they do very few things well 73
- A little over 2 200 years ago the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse 76
- One of the threats to endangered sea turtle species is the use of nets by commercial shrimp fishing boats When turtles get accidentally caught in the nets they cannot rise to the surface of the ocean to breathe and they die 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the incident and help more effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85474860335 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5992066645 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508379888268 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9736392583 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1758190934 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587723918534 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614985052688 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124899019865 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515605064878 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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