Some people think that government in developing countries should introduce new technologies to people in order to improve the quality of life ,while others believe that in order to achieve that government should offer free education for all.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
How to ameliorate the living standard for the people in developing areas in this world has caused a lot discussions. Generally, the viewpoints diverged into two groups . It is believed by one group that the introduction of new technology to people in developing countries is a great improvement to the quality of their lives there. Still, there is another group saying that it is free education that could help people to achieve this goal. I tend to side with the latter viewpoint.
As a whole, people are convinced that novel technology literally has the potential to redefine people’s life ,bringing fundamental positive changes .Therefore, it levels up the living standard. More specifically, the state-of-art technological breakthroughs makes lives way much convenient. It not only frees labors from tedious routine works , it also allows people to savor the fun bought by it anytime and anywhere. However, it is mere the first phrase of what technology brings to people. If people really take a close look at the life which is teemed with all type of technology, it is hard to say technology aid people or they rule people and make people somewhat slaves to them. Being a slave is a torture，which has nothing to do with making a happier society. If free education is another alternative to create a happier society , it is definitely a better choice.
To start with, education opportunities provided freely by governments give a great financial relief to most households in developing countries. The truth is that most families have already realized the most direct and fastest way to improve life quality is to get a better education for family members. To meet their goals, parents would like to save every penny and invest a great proportion of their income to education for the sake of their children , the proportion as big as 70 percentage of a whole year family income. Definitely , it could be imagined that the left money is so little that it could not allow the families to allocate to any other parts ,like outbound travelling , house restoration, and so on but to cover their daily expenses. A family without any escape from pressure is not a happy one. On the contrary , provided that such a huge expense was offered by government , the living standard of a family could by obviously and greatly improved.
What is more , what free education given by countries offers is free spirits , and content for lives for their citizens in the long term while what high technology bestows is the fun and convenience temporarily. It can be predicted that more people could get cultivated by various fields of knowledge , and the opportunities are not just confined to children and teenagers. Employees who are unsatisfied with their current situation and would want to polish themselves with more skills would have a chance to go back to school without the concerning of tuition fee and increasing their burden to family finance, so do the seniors who are free from work and willing to learn something that would fulfill their lives. The education chances make citizens truly have sense of security to build and develop their career and sense of satisfaction about their lives.
In conclusion , those one who desire to have more technologies to their lives , thereby building a merrier society are quite short-sighted. A better solution is to open up the opportunities of free education to people because it is going to release a family from tuition frees and fundamentally make people content with their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, really, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion, on the contrary, to start with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 41.998997996 200% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2937.0 1615.20841683 182% => OK
No of words: 586.0 315.596192385 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01194539249 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92010537223 4.20363070211 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85145812862 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 176.041082164 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503412969283 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 931.5 506.74238477 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1248293424 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.375 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54166666667 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240085041625 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069033862478 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063553334533 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142947823873 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455578290527 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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