Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behavior. What’s your opinion?
In the era of technology, violence has become an controversial topic discussed by a myriad of people all over the world. Savagery on TV and in electric games affects harmfully on the society, but other people claim that these factors do not cause any important influence on people’s manner. I totally agree with the idea violence brings bad results to everyone because not only does it lead to mental instability in people, especially developing children but it also affect economic life of people.
Scientists believe that if people often exposed to savagery in the media or in reality, they will experience earnest psychological problems. This causes huge consequences in many people’s lives such as depression, anxiety, reduced cognetive skills, etc. There are even people, mostly children, who become more aggressive, easily becoming perpetrators or victims of violent acts in real life. My cousin is an example for this. He is only 8 years old, because of watching too many violent films on the television, he started learning what was in the movies and often went out to fight. My aunt and uncle were really nervous about him.
In addition, there are lots of ideas supposed that it also makes economic stagnation. When people know violence, they will lose themselves and fall deeper into crime. They are willing to spend a large amount of money on bad things and don't know when to stop. Years ago, when I was a child, my neighbours was a boss in a big company. But since he lost his job, he has drunk a great deal of beer and wine and beaten his wife, and he also spent a lot of money on gambling and betting too.
In conclusion, violence is very horrendous, so we have to prevent savage ways from society and human, especially youngsters. To reach this, everybody must be together and contribute to repelling it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84345047923 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66237529268 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664536741214 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6306075321 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.75 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5625 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161549832963 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443511595692 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705960079614 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911595567706 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705962889392 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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