Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?
It is highly debated topic that at what extend violence is censored. Many argue that violence shown in television and in computer games cause detrimental effect on people. While other believe that such contents do not impact the society majorly. In my point of view, due to violence telecast, crime rate has increased and sympathy has decreased among the humankind. Hence, I believe that violence certainly worsen the mindset of people.
To begin with, violent content in television and video games is one of the major contributors of today's increased crime rate in the world. The crime is being glorified in media these days. As a results, people think that committing a crime is one of the ways to become renowned. Since the mindset has been changed this way, it is not unusual for people to get their selves implicated into any crime. For example, Money Heist, a famous web series of Netflix, is showing an act of theft as a glory. Such television programs instigate people to carry out a criminal act.
Secondly, violence also causes the feelings of people weakened for other humans. This can be seen by decreased sensitivity and sympathy of people even among family members. It is a bitter truth, that people are falling apart from each other. Violence in the form of murders are critically performing key role in this matter. The faith among people has decreased by watching the regular shows involving different crimes. People do not naturally trust on any stranger as if they a stranger being a criminal. For instance, while travelling to any foreign country, people tends to spend their duration of stay cautiously and forget to enjoy it. This has happened due to the feeling of insecurity developed as a result of watching violent content on various source of entertainment.
In conclusion, I agree with the belief of some people that violent content has detrimental effect on the society not only because the crime rate has increased but also trust between humans are weakening as consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96142433234 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61468620047 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548961424332 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8704149692 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.9879759519 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278566417432 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793641019144 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452586046412 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158338723152 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340852321684 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.