Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree?
In modern days, Obesity is one of the most concerning diseases that happen in our daily life, especially among children, it is also thought that government should be responsible for an increase in the aforementioned problem. From my point of view, I agree with that thinking, and I will explain it clearly in my essay.
On the one hand, Governments should prioritize this problem first due to its global effects. Firstly,
putting more taxes on fast food services may reduce the amounts of unnecessary oil and fats that are consumed by our bodies regularly. Moreover, they should regulate publicity on sugar and carbohydrates, some cakes and pantries should contain more sugar than normal which is an addiction for sweet-lover or ages below 16. Last but not least, mandatory sports should be given to children as soon as possible, due to the development of technology, gaming devices are now popular to most kids and their time for outdoor activities are limited, forcing them to play sports is a judicious idea
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n my opinion, the lifestyle that comes from family is not essential to be responsible for the rise in obesity. Parents have their options to buy either healthy food or fast food, as well as giving habit to play sports or not, depending on the way they treat their, adiposity could have occurred. According to the information which was given by The BBC, some children confess that obesity often happens when they succumb to temptations, if they lose their self-restraint, they will eat anything without their parents' observation. Therefore, only governments can manage them strictly.
In conclusion, I believe that this argument has its own merits and demerits. On balance, however, it seems that governments should take responsibility for young children's obesity with the aforementioned solutions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...irst due to its global effects. Firstly, putting more taxes on fast food services...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15878378378 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88362158856 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2553213915 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.818181818 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200404189877 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704121600729 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694901317639 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111425151266 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523871137575 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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