Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves.
Some people think that the most essential goal of education is to educate people on how to teach themselves, while others disagree. For me, I agree with the statement. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, one of the goals of education is to teach students knowledge, and teaching people how to self-teach themselves helps them become more knowledgeable. Take my friend Todd as an example. Todd was a self-taught programmer, and he learned various programming knowledge from Indian Youtubers. Also, he acquired numerous coding techniques by interacting with open-source engineers on Github. Therefore, even though he was still 19 years old, he could answer 80% of questions asked on Stackoverflow. On the contrary, my brother's algorithm professor, Mr. Lieu, set up a strict schedule for his students to follow. His teacher required all students to complete no less than 20 pages of algorithm problem sets every week, but these problems are so hard that each of these problems may require three months of research and investigation. Eventually, my brother could not absorb most algorithm knowledge from Mr. Lieu. Evidently, according to Todd and my brother’s experience, I believe self-learning helps students become more knowledgeable.
Secondly, education should focus on students' health, and letting students learn skills by themselves makes them healthier. For instance, my friend Linda went through a high-pressure education in Taiwan. Her parents required her to go to English and Physics cram schools nearly every day. Not only that, her math teacher assigned more than four math worksheets per day. Therefore, she slept less than five hours every night. In addition, her constant unhappiness made her get depression and schizophrenia. In the long run, her physical and health condition was so terrible that she needed to go to the hospital for sleeping pills and schizophrenia treatments. Contrarily, my aunt allowed my cousin, Ken, to self-teach himself. So whenever Ken felt exhausted, he could take a short rest. Similarly, he had the choice to stop learning when he felt sick or despondent. That is, Ken did not need to worry about not being able to finish his homework. Apparently, he had a healthier body and mental status compared to Linda.
In conclusion, I maintain that teaching people how to educate themselves is extremely vital because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 37, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... Secondly, education should focus on students health, and letting students learn skil...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31070496084 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01181923251 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613577023499 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.481784692 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.36 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.32 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.32 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221585813519 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592413391667 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107950960491 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213697376812 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142410515165 0.0645574589148 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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