Imagine that you have been given the opportunity to advise the government of a city or region (area) that you are familiar with to spend more money on ONE thing to benefit the city or region. Which ONE of these do you believe would be the most beneficial for the city or region? Why?
-Providing more affordable housing
-Reducing air and water pollution
-Attracting new businesses to the city or region
If I have enough expertise to advise the government of one thing that can benefit the city or region, some people would undoubtedly suggest the government to provide more affordable housing. Others would recommend the government to reduce air and water pollution. Still others claim that attracting new businesses to the city or region is the most favorable approach. For me, I believe that attracting new businesses is the best approach. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, in order to benefit city or gegional citizens, the government should place more emphasis on the economy. Admittedly, suggesting the government attract new businesses to the city or region can boost the local economy. As an example, the Hsinchu City government assisted engineers and investors in creating several information-science related job opportunities. Therefore, thousands of IT companies decided to reside in Hsinchu, and these corporations benefitted Hsinchu by attracting intelligent students, well-educated engineers, and prestigious researchers to reside there. Several decades later, Hsinchu turned it into the third most prosperous and second most richest city in Taiwan. On the other hand, four years ago, the Miaoli County government planned to provide a more affordable housing price by forcibly enacting the "Miaoli County Minimum Housing Price Decree". Nevertheless, the local economy of Miaoli County collapsed because no housing firm wanted to establish in Miaoli County. Apparently, offering more affordable prices is not a good idea.
In addition, the government should make sure that citizens had enough resources, especially electricity, to live a worriless life, and conspicuously, attracting new businesses to the city can help the government achieve the goal. Take Hsinchu City government again as an example. The government attracted several petroleum companies to reside in Hsinchu, leading to a high concentration of power plants built there. In the end, these energy firms benefits the whole city wiith the ability to generate nearly 80% of the city's total electricity, and Hsinchu residents never encounter electricity shortage for once. On the other hand, the Hualien County government decided to reduce air and water pollution, so it replaced nuclear plants and fossil fuel plants with windmills or solar panels. Unfortunately, these environmental friendly panels are extraordinarily inefficient, resulting in 30% of the citizens failed to have access to stable electricity.
In conclusion, if I have enough knowledge to advise the government of one thing that can benefit a city, I would undoubtedly recommend it to attract new businesses due to the aforementioned reasons.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ment to reduce air and water pollution. Still others claim that attracting new busine...
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Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'richest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: richest
...to the third most prosperous and second most richest city in Taiwan. On the other hand, four...
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Line 3, column 674, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the richest'.
Suggestion: most the richest
...to the third most prosperous and second most richest city in Taiwan. On the other hand, four...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, therefore, third, well, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63080684597 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16074606641 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518337408313 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9180455471 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.15 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.45 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243586600354 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783906470688 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067227484518 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171840098666 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525788408446 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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