The most ideal path for a society to set up its youngsters for positions of authority in government, industry, or different fields is by imparting in them a feeling of collaboration, not rivalry."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In today's society the main problem with the youth is that they are demotivated to do anything that does not hold meaning or importance to them. In such a scenario the main thing that motivates them is a feeling to outsmart others, or be better than others. So I believe that rivalry would be the strongest motivator for the youngsters to take on positions of authority in any field.
For us youngsters, the society that we grew up in, the culture around us, the books & movies of our age have inculcated a mindset of competition among us. The kind of attitude that motivates the youth & pushes them to achieve something roots from their need to prove somebody wrong or out best someone. We have innumerable examples of this around us. We see that industry leaders like Ghazal Alag, the CEO of MamaEarth, the newest shark on shark tank India, was faced with a new idea & the need to prove herself & challenge herself to be better than others which resulted in her starting her own company. Sportsmen like Virat Kohli, when challenged with the best rival sportsmen end up showing giving their best performance.
Yes, a good collaborative environment is important for growth, but as the saying goes, keep your friends close & your enemies closer. Because your friends show you your strengths, but your enemies play at your weaknesses & that is how you end up fixing them & becoming stronger. In the movies Mission Mangal, Rakesh Dhawan & his team of youngsters are continuously demotivated by Rupert Desai who is from Nasa & believes their efforts to build a Mars Orbiter to be frugal. But they only get motivated by this rivalry & in the process of proving him wrong end up putting their brains to work & getting the most creative & innovative ideas, that too on a limited budget. In the end Rakesh thanks Rupert for the strong rivalry he provided , which helped them in out besting themselves & becoming leaders & an example for the world.
Looking at these examples, we can conclude that the youth these days needs a tough competitor to overcome their own shortcomings & becoming their best version. Nothing like a healthy rivalry to encourage you to get on top of your game & emerge as a world leader.
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- The most ideal path for a society to set up its youngsters for positions of authority in government industry or different fields is by imparting in them a feeling of collaboration not rivalry Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you a 75
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85866666667 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59565041615 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581333333333 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1474620918 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.466666667 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.46666666667 5.21951772744 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195514161383 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608456815338 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053969210501 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108428684196 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524218761641 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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