The most ideal path for a society to set up its youngsters for positions of authority in government, industry, or different fields is by imparting in them a feeling of collaboration, not rivalry."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In today's world, where achieving 'World Peace' is merely thought as something unattainable, the first step towards achieving this mission of 'World Peace' is making sure that the governments of the world, the CEO's of the most-valued companies and authorities with power and responsibilty should co-exist with collaboration, co-operation and a sense of oneness with each other. For this reason, I partially agree with the issue at hand. To nurture young minds in a milieu of collaboration and co-operation will surely result in setting up youngsters for positions of authority.
A leader can only live up to his or her position if they learn to listen to and empathise with their followers. This quality of a leader, even though very important, takes a backseat a lot of times. Inculcating a quality of collaboration with individuals early on, can greatly improve the quality of a leader or an authortorian figure. Working well with others always produces great outputs for the team, government or the company. resolving any conflicts a t first, when they are identified and working with a oneness toward a common goal, always helps the team to reach the common goal successfully and quicker.
Being able to collaborate with multiple people even at the highest position in a country is extremely essential to help the country develop. For a prime minister of a country, it is of great importance that he understands the problems of his country at the grassroots level. There are various socio-economic classes in a country, each with a different outlook on life, each with a different vision for their country. It is imperative that a prime minister be able to collaborate with the smallest and poorest villages in the country and the richest individuals in the country. The prime minister of India, Mr. Narendra Modi, often speaks to all classes of society as well as collaborates on a international level with the countries of the world. The recent improvements of the BRICS nations, in which Mr. Narendra Modi played an important role, demonstrates the importance of collaboration, not just within the country, but also with the emerging super-powers of the world.
Nevertheless, I do agree that sometimes, the quality of rivalry can fuel improvement and make one do better than their opponent. This quality comes in very handy in today's world when everyone is trying to be better than the other. A healthy rivalry or competition only makes someone better at what they do. If someone has a rivalry with ones past self, it is even better because the have an ambition to always do better than they did before. So, I do partially agree that rivarly in youngsters does enable them to perform better at any level whether just as a team-player or a leader.
To conclude I would like to emphasize on the fact that, the contemporary world is in need of peace, collaboration and co-operation, not just between our authorities but also between our communities and societies. It is very important to inculcate a quality of collaboration and inclusion in all our youngsters, to rid this world of war and hate, and bring in peace and harmony.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Resolving
...or the team, government or the company. resolving any conflicts a t first, when they are ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s of society as well as collaborates on a international level with the countries ...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... they do. If someone has a rivalry with ones past self, it is even better because th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nevertheless, so, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2619.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 525.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98857142857 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98909522254 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4448119467 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.714285714 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95238095238 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120177655976 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040321162116 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372638564932 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0639429780534 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292101573265 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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