The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than six hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. On the basis of this study, we recommend that businesses hire only people who need less than six hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument which appeared as apart of a article in a business magazine, stating that advertising firms with executives needing less than six hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth, is not completely sound as it has many logical flaws.
Firstly, the argument suggests that there is a association between the amount of sleep needed by the executives working in the advertising firms studied and the success of their firms. This relation does not appear to be logically accurate, since 'success' of a firm, per say, depends on numerous factors, such a advertisment quality and rates, competitiveness of market, business rivals and other profitable strategies. Even though sleep is an important factor contributing to the physical well being of the employees, the amount of sleep required cannot be logically considered a valid indicator of the success of a firm.
Secondly, the study mentioned in the argument does not take in account other factors that might influence the health status of the executives. It does not state the number of male and female participants in the study, since the two sexes have different biological requirement, and sleeping hours required would not fulfil as a proper criterion as a measure or their working abilities.
Third, the argument takes is bases on a study conducted in advertisment companies, but states that all businesses should hire more employees who need less than six hours of sleep. These two statements do not quite match. The executives of the advertisement companises might not be involved in any sort of physical labour, and less thatn six hours of sleep might suffice for them. But various other firms, such as builders and construction companies need intense physical hardwork. The employees of such firms might need more sleeping hours to perform well at their work.
Moreover, the study does not take in account the number of working hours, working conditions and wages. All of these factors countribute to how well employees work in a company.
Thus, we can infer that the conclusion of the above argument that, businesses should only hire people who need less that six hpurs of sleep is not logically valid, and is full of numerous flaws. The argument can however be strengthened by conducting a comprehensive study on a wider range, including employees form different ranks and companies, and other parameters of physical health, not just restricted to sleeping hours required by executives of advertisment companies.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 406 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.489 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.054 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.772 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.132 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: APART_A_PART[2]
Message: Wrong collocation. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: apart from
The argument which appeared as apart of a article in a business magazine, stati...
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Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...The argument which appeared as apart of a article in a business magazine, stating...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ly, the argument suggests that there is a association between the amount of sleep...
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Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: PER_SE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'per se' (=by itself, by themselves)?
Suggestion: per se
...ally accurate, since success of a firm, per say, depends on numerous factors, such a ad...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... say, depends on numerous factors, such a advertisment quality and rates, competi...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, well, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20197044335 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8330091661 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497536945813 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6501867576 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.8 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0666666667 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263640486294 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08834946837 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691501248 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137081477792 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618507937375 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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