Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are harmful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Many think that advertisement brings more demerits since they manipulate people's minds. While some agree with that notion, I believe it impacts positively as it addresses solutions to people's problems.
Advertisements can be manipulated in people's minds as it is encouraged by the companies' interest to boost sales. This leads to irrational purchasing behavior adopted by customers, resulting from being driven by emotion that leads to an unhealthy lifestyle. For instance, Apple is addressed as a luxury brand that exclusively targets those who have money, creating a stigma only the rich own an iPhone. Due to the desire to be included in such status, many do everything to own an iPhone, including putting themselves in debt. Young adults in many developing nations statistically show this. Thus, a brand advertisement can encourage people's purchases by influencing their mindset.
On the other hand, offering a solution to tackle people's problems is the main reason advertisement impacts more positively, making their life more convenient. This is because products are primarily created to solve people's problems, but sometimes people are unaware as no advertisements are seen around. For instance, before putting an ad on Youtube, many young Indonesian did not know about an app called Bisaivest, which can help them to calculate a stock's intrinsic value using AI. At the same time, the manual calculation is the main reason they find it challenging to invest in stock. After seeing the Bisainvest ad, many reviews say that the app truly helps them invest in the desired stock.
To conclude, although some advertisements can be manipulated to people's thoughts, I argue it also brings merit as highlighting solutions to tackle people's problems. If possible, people need to differ which advertisement is manipulating and which one is not.
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- Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement 73
- Some people think that drug addicts should be treated as criminals and sent to jail while others believe that they should be treated as patients and sent hospitals 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a stock' or simply 'stocks'?
Suggestion: a stock; stocks
...ivest, which can help them to calculate a stocks intrinsic value using AI. At the same t...
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Line 5, column 571, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'investing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: investing
...he main reason they find it challenging to invest in stock. After seeing the Bisainvest a...
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Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...me advertisements can be manipulated to peoples thoughts, I argue it also brings merit ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3676975945 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01159178066 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618556701031 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.769587134 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.133333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110973503549 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040108313535 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330503240504 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810151555007 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437360634004 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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