People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Along with the progress of human civilization and the complexity of society, many people began to attend university for a variety of purposes, giving rise to the issue of why people attend university. Logically, people who grew up in a diverse environment would certainly maintain various understandings of such an issue, but according to my rationale, the reason why people attend university is that they can achieve profound knowledge and can build relationships with people in the university.
First, the university provides more in-depth thoughts that increase one's knowledge. To be specific, what students learn in high school is just intermediate knowledge about general subjects, such as mathematics, history, arts, and language. In other words, they cannot pursue profound knowledge about those subjects in high school. However, if a person attends university, that person could choose the subject he wants to study and learn topics that were not tackled in the high school curriculum. This situation is best demonstrated by my sister's experience. My sister had a dream to be a biologist in the medical field. At first, she thought the high school curriculum is enough to give her information to be a biologist and would be better to work in the hospital right after high school graduation to get work experience. However, after she graduated high school, she realized that the knowledge achieved in high school is not enough to be a biologist, she needed to have better knowledge about the field, which drove her to go to the university and major in medical biology. Ultimately, since the knowledge people got in high school is not enough to achieve their dream, they choose to go to the university to be professionals in their field and achieve their goals.
On top of that, people can build bonds and make connections in university. All humans require so-called connections to survive in this harsh society. Indeed, the connection is not a must thing to have but it would somehow help when a person encounters obstacles that are hard to deal with alone. Thus, since university is where many peers gather that have similar knowledge and level, contemporary people go to the university to make bonds and make connections that would help them someday. For instance, my father once got fired from his occupation due to the IMF crisis that happened in Korea. This crisis led many companies to get bankrupt and caused a huge amount of unemployment, and my father was one of its victims. While my father was struggling to get a job, he asked one of his friends from college if he can get an occupation in a friend’s company. Since that friend knows my father and friend from the university, he helped my father to get a job in his company. Due to this, my father was able to overcome one of the major obstacles in his life and success in the future. From this example, we can see how the connection built in university could help a person to get over the problem he or she faces. Thus, people go to the university to build relationships with people in the university.
In conclusion, from the above substantiation and assessments, the reason why people attend the university is to increase their knowledge and build connections with other people. Therefore, nothing in my mind regarding the previous issue overshadows the statement above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 52.1666666667 176% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2794.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97153024911 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83985319169 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444839857651 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2593353764 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.416666667 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20030129837 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608631920093 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0783692337644 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161134497442 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886840634272 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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