It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people believe that media, pop culture and friends are generally though to have the biggest impact on a child’s development. While other people strongly believe that family is the most important factor. Personally, I agree with the former opinion for a number of reasons.
Most children live with their family: their parents or grandparents. Children are taught and cared for by their families, children will imitate and learn from their parents' personalities and actions, thereby affecting the formation and development of children's personalities. The surrounding environment and family will directly affect the child's development, for example, children living in an unhappy family will have a rebellious personality, resistance, crime rate in these children is also higher. Therefore, the family is also a major factor in the growth of children.
However, in my opinion, with the development of science and technology, children are exposed to smart devices and the internet from a young age, they learn and receive everything from the internet, thereby affecting their thinking children's thoughts and actions. In addition, children are increasingly going to school, spending more time with friends than family, they often have the habit of imitating what they are exposed to. Children will imitate each other, learn from each other, also known as crowd psychology because they do not have much experience, so they will be easily influenced. A simple example is the Tiktok application that is being loved by young people, this application is constantly updated with many new trends and children will imitate those trends, to integrate with friends, children others will follow.
To summarize, both family and external factors play an important role in children's development although my view is that external factors have more influence on children but children need both the above factors to be able to perfect and develop both physically and mentally better.
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- It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child s development are media pop culture and friends A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role Discuss both views and give your opinion 11
- It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child s development are media pop culture and friends A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role Discuss both views and give your opinion 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...iggest impact on a child’s development. While other people strongly believe that fami...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46732026144 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77041893381 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552287581699 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.0648024165 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.416666667 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162152238835 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724862597571 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680163905888 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133787088701 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0823074348923 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.