Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.
Over the past century, after the onset of democracy in most developed and developing nations, there have been several politicians who have hidden valuable information from the public and have been criticized rightly so. The prompt suggests that some people believe that this is necessary or desirable, however, I mostly disagree for two main reasons. I think that most information should be made public, but I do concede that in specific scenarios, such as military or army tactics, should be kept confidential.
To begin with, I think that information about the government or a nation's law-making body should be kept public. This helps in providing the citizens of the country an account of the deeds, mistakes and data on the premises of which a country makes law. Moreover, providing such information officially leads to less confusion, and speculation from the citizens and they are able to cast their votes based on real data. If this were not the case, then citizens would be stuck with heated debate and people could potentially vote for someone they would not if the factual data was present. For instance, consider a bill that proposes changes in the tax structure where the tax on certain goods is increased and on certain goods they are decreased. If the government were to provide information about why tax on certain goods needs to be increased or decreased there would be less uproar from the citizens who are badly affected from it. Providing clarity to citizens of a country can help alleviate protests and debates, and hence can prove to be beneficial.
Furthermore, transparency in the government can help bring to light the corrupt individuals who are stealing tax-payer money. Over the years, we have seen many cases where local politicians pocket some of the funding provided by the government to improve society. For instance, some politicians in India conceal the exact expenditure and account of money spent in a project like road construction. Making such information public would help curb venality and make better use of the tax paid by the people. In addition, transparency encourages politicians to do good and show how well they have done compared to others by providing quantifiable data. Thus, making accounting information public, not only promotes good behavior but also discourages malpractices such as corruption.
However, I do concede that in the cases like military strategy, information must be kept confidential from the people to protect them as revealing them would prove advantageos to the enemy. Withholding such information does not prove to be harmful to the citizens of a country but rather can help boost their security and defense. Nonetheless, choosing what information must be disclosed and what should not, must be decided and if the latter is chosen then adequate reasoning must be provided.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...hat information about the government or a nations law-making body should be kept public. ...
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Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ny cases where local politicians pocket some of the funding provided by the government to i...
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Line 7, column 496, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en adequate reasoning must be provided.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, thus, well, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16163793103 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82518608055 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502155172414 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0248208151 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.052631579 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267681093433 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805611156199 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052682067581 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166775169683 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510271496584 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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