The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
For a long time art has been considered as an essential part of all cultures in the world.However ,many of people's value have changed ,and we tend to consider science, technology and public services more than art.While I believe that arts, music and theatre is not a waste of money, and on the contrary, they are indispensable parts of public service that touch people's live. Governmnets should not invest these funds in public services instead.
First of all, art, music and theatre are an integral part of the society's culture and intellectual development and amusement.For example, art and music draw people's attention to diverse phenomena represent the inward significant of things.Quite often a single drawing piece or song can exhort myriads of people to reconsider their attitude towards some situation.Moreover a prosperous art, music and theatre sector is an economic asset that creates new jobs and attracts tourism revenue.For the reason that visiting museums, watching movies and listening to music are common ways of relaxation and entertainment.
Secondly, the government definitely should allocate a large part of budget on public services for the reason that great public services enable people to enjoy equal rights to health care, eduction and employment, which plays a vital role in maintaining social stability and long-term stability.When a person is faced with poverty or disease, a nice picture or a touching piece of music can not change the difficulties.He needs social economic relief. Therefore, the input of public service comes first.
To sum up, although I agree that government should allocate a large part of budget on public services, they should not invest arts' funds in public services. Art, music and theatre are also equally important
in modern people's life.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
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...ology and public services more than art.While I believe that arts, music and theatre ...
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Suggestion: For
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...resent the inward significant of things.Quite often a single drawing piece or song ca...
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...r their attitude towards some situation.Moreover a prosperous art, music and theatre sec...
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...s new jobs and attracts tourism revenue.For the reason that visiting museums, watch...
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...ocial stability and long-term stability.When a person is faced with poverty or disea...
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Suggestion: He
...f music can not change the difficulties.He needs social economic relief. Therefore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34035087719 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92288494241 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585964912281 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.2975951904 197% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 206.552459117 49.4020404114 418% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 217.428571429 106.682146367 204% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 40.7142857143 20.7667163134 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.4285714286 7.06120827912 261% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326219283518 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181228330309 0.084324248473 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109784317694 0.0667982634062 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169248516239 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117368470191 0.056905535591 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.1 13.0946893788 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.42 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 11.3001002004 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.58 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.1190380762 178% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ntial part of all cultures in the world.However ,many of peoples value have changed ,an...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...art of all cultures in the world.However ,many of peoples value have changed ,and ...
^^
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ever ,many of peoples value have changed ,and we tend to consider science, technol...
^^
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...ology and public services more than art.While I believe that arts, music and theatre ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
... intellectual development and amusement.For example, art and music draw peoples att...
^^^
Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Quite
...resent the inward significant of things.Quite often a single drawing piece or song ca...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...r their attitude towards some situation.Moreover a prosperous art, music and theatre sec...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...r their attitude towards some situation.Moreover a prosperous art, music and theatre sec...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...s new jobs and attracts tourism revenue.For the reason that visiting museums, watch...
^^^
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: When
...ocial stability and long-term stability.When a person is faced with poverty or disea...
^^^^
Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...f music can not change the difficulties.He needs social economic relief. Therefore...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34035087719 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92288494241 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585964912281 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.2975951904 197% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 206.552459117 49.4020404114 418% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 217.428571429 106.682146367 204% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 40.7142857143 20.7667163134 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 18.4285714286 7.06120827912 261% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326219283518 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181228330309 0.084324248473 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109784317694 0.0667982634062 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169248516239 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117368470191 0.056905535591 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.1 13.0946893788 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.42 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 11.3001002004 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.58 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.1190380762 178% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.