Some people want to have a job where they can make or do things with their hands. Others prefer having a job where they can works with their heads and thinking. Which type of job do you prefer?
Many people have different beliefs and preferences on what kind of job they want to have. Some want to do a job that involves more usage of their hands whereas some are of the opinion of doing work that uses more of their brains. Of the given choices I prefer that working with usage of one’s own knowledge rather than hands. I feel this for two reasons which I have described in the following essay.
First of all, working with the head and thinking involves a lot of analysis. One has to study a lot and spend hours and hours to find a technical solution of one problem.This will help person in improving their knowledge as he would go far and beyond his thinking to solve the issue, will read a lot of literature, will research, will study various academic papers and then come to solution. Moreover, it is not that the person doesn't have to use their creativity or innovation, he can make new inventions and technologies by using his brain and his analytical skills. For example, my brother is a software engineer, he develops new software which is helpful for the common public and for this he has to think a lot and use his all abilities and expertise. Without him, I would have never known that it is not just sitting and working but also requires a lot more things.
Secondly, such jobs that involve the use of thoughts don’t require any specific environment for working whereas people who work with using their hands require a certain workplace where they can work peacefully. Additionally, the ones who do jobs with their education and thinking can work anywhere, they can even manage to work from home so it is easier to manage everything. They can manage their family affairs too along with work by easily working from home. On the other hand, they can also be financially stable as nowadays job involving computers and softwares are the highest paid jobs. For instance, I am working with an software company, I can easily manage my work and home simultaneously without any compromises for my pay as my physical presence is not mandatory in company. Thus, working with brains has many benefits.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that jobs that involve your mind are much preferable than that involving hands and physical presence. It is because it not only improves our knowledge but also helps us to work easily from anywhere without being physically present in the form.
- Toefl writing task one 3
- All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language Agree Disagree 60
- Some people want to have a job where they can make or do things with their hands Others prefer having a job where they can works with their heads and thinking Which type of job do you prefer 76
- Some students prefer classes with frequent discussions between the professor and with almost no lectures Others students prefer classes with many lectures and almost no discussions PREFERANCE 90
- All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language Agree Disagree 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74401913876 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55558946665 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504784688995 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2837844178 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.647058824 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5882352941 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1176470588 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428025810651 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142903784777 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100429879295 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247465929687 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149261980608 0.0645574589148 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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