The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
In the summary provided, the author states that the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia declined steadily because the use of Salicylates is elevated in foods consumed by the people of that city. The author has come to this conclusion based on the analysis that this commercial use of salicylates(a member of the chemical family of aspirin) correlates to the fact that there has been a tremendous reduction in the average number of headaches of citizens of Mentia. It’s easy to understand why this correlation may stand valid for the author, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions and thus not strong enough to validate the author’s conclusion.
First of all, Citing the twenty-year study that highlights a decline in the number of headaches reported in the city, the author states that the rise in the industrial usage of this chemical(Salicylate) is the ideal explanation behind it. It’s not clear, however, the scope and validity of this study for multiple reasons. The study, as mentioned, is a compilation of reports from the previous twenty years. There is a possibility that there might have taken place, numerous dynamical changes in the city’s industrial elements in reference to food consumption.
Additionally, even if the fact that the number of headaches has reportedly declined, it cannot significantly be the sole reason for this change in statistics. There can be other dynamic reasons that might contribute to the report, like advancement in the medical fields, an increase in the percentage of adaptivity of healthy patterns in people of the city, limited range of people being surveyed for the report, etc. If either of these scenarios have merit, then the assumption made by the author does not hold water.
Building upon the implication that Salicylates, being a member of the family of Aspirin have the potential to help treat a headache, the author, by establishing a correlation between these two chemicals, culminates that adding Salicylates will effectively cure headaches similarly as Aspirin does. It is not necessarily true that all chemicals that belong to the same family of a particular medicine, have the same functionality as that medicine. Thus, the assumption that the derivatives of a particular medicine have the same formula as the medicine itself significantly weakens the argument.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more evidence, then it is possible to fully evaluate the viability of the inference
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2133 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.079 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.938 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.137 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.629 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the summary provided, the author stat...
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Suggestion:
...h to validate the author’s conclusion. First of all, Citing the twenty-year stu...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ade by the author does not hold water. Building upon the implication that Salic...
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...significantly weakens the argument. In conclusion, the argument, as it stand...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24523809524 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01455276031 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519047619048 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8647058536 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.866666667 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231341822041 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694117058969 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725426670409 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109486575688 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871651318973 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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