The diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as canned fruits. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the process below.
The pictogram illustrates the steps of canned pear manufacture .
Gennerally, there are 4 main steps in the process of producing canned pears, beginning with picking by hands and ending with canned pears distribution.
Firstly, farmers handily collected pears on the fields before transporting to the fatories . After being arrived at the factories, the pears will deeply washed in a kind of chemical after being checked carefully to ensure the quality of the each product
In the next stage of the manufacture, the pears will be preserved at low temperature . Then, these large amount of pears is weighed in order to be separated into small parts before the skin is peeled off. After that, the pears is cut into small slices
The slices of pear is then canned and sealed . These sealed cans of pears are cooked at suitable temperature before the logo or label of the company is sticked on it .
Finally, the completed products are stored before being distributed to different stores in the city .
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pears'' or 'pear's'?
Suggestion: pears'; pear's
...picking by hands and ending with canned pears distribution. Firstly, farmers handi...
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...elds before transporting to the fatories . After being arrived at the factories, t...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'wash'
Suggestion: wash
...at the factories, the pears will deeply washed in a kind of chemical after being check...
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...ars will be preserved at low temperature . Then, these large amount of pears is we...
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Suggestion: are
...into small slices The slices of pear is then canned and sealed . These sealed c...
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...slices of pear is then canned and sealed . These sealed cans of pears are cooked a...
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...or label of the company is sticked on it . Finally, the completed products are...
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...tributed to different stores in the city .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 843.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07831325301 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64812019411 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584337349398 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1588127689 43.030603864 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.375 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.23603664747 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146214080478 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708738112823 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330249782314 0.0843802449381 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830385800053 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317841447311 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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