Children today are to dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional past times than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with the statement ? Write an essay about 250 words to express your opinion.
In this day and age, it is an undeniable trend that more and more children spend their leisure time on electronic devices. However, others said that it is important to encourage children to participate in outdoor activities, which has optimistic impacts not only on their health conditions but also on their academic performance. I would argue that playing outdoor sports rather than playing video games all day at home.
To begin with, outdoor activities play a pivotal role in promoting physical health among children. Engaging in sports, such as soccer, basketball, or swimming, requires physical exertion, leading to improved cardiovascular fitness, enhanced motor skills, and increased coordination. Regular outdoor play helps children develop strength, agility, and endurance, reducing the risk of obesity and related health issues. Moreover, exposure to natural sunlight allows the body to produce vitamin D, which is essential for bone health and immune function. Outdoor activities provide a break from the pressures of technology and allow children to connect with the natural world. Therefore, it can also enhance children 's creativity and imagination.
Additionally, engaging in outdoor activities exposes children to the wonders of the natural world, fostering environmental awareness and a sense of responsibility towards the planet. Exploring parks, hiking trails, or participating in nature conservation activities educates children about the importance of preserving and protecting the environment. Outdoor play allows children to witness the beauty of nature firsthand, developing a deep appreciation for its biodiversity and ecosystems. This awareness instills a sense of environmental stewardship, encouraging children to become environmentally conscious individuals who strive to make a positive impact on the world. Also, it broadens their understanding of the world and encourages the sense of exploration.
To sum up, I believe that playing outdoor sports help children more than playing games depending on technologies. We should be in touch with the technology and so keeping a certain time for playing games on computers would not harm. But total dependency on computer games is harmful. Indeed playing outdoors helps children to be healthy and fit. It also entertains them and helps to refresh their mind and body.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...ependency on computer games is harmful. Indeed playing outdoors helps children to be h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, moreover, so, still, therefore, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70085470085 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10132771861 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581196581197 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7299065831 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.315789474 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223844257252 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754555837272 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670746094302 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149411158973 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0923727412399 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.78 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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