IELTS essay The qualities that make someone admirable

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IELTS-essay: The qualities that make someone admirable

People always admire successful people and the characteristics that help them reach achievement. The very two personalities they have to train on the path to success are passion and perseverance.
People talk too much about we must have passion for doing anything from trivial things to great things. So what is passion? It is the enjoyment when you do something such as doing business, working in art industries, or only the small thing like growing a bonsai tree. Everything you do must start from your pleasure. Moreover, you will not do anything for a long time and do it well if you do not like doing it. On the road to success, you will meet a lot of difficulties and challenges and your passion is the only thing that helps you conquer and make you move forward. The second characteristic you have to gain is perseverance. Everybody knows persistence is a good personality that brings us many benefits and success. However, why few people know how to be patient to come to success. Motivation is something that gets you started. A habit is a thing that keeps you going. Thus, you have to be patient until what you do become your habit. Perseverance and discipline will be the motivation that helps you be calm and confident to face obstacles and failure on the road to make dreams come true.
Summing up, there will be many characteristics that help lots of millionaires and billionaires to become successful. The two qualities we should admire are passion and perseverance which are typical and crucial for everybody to achieve success. We must know exactly what we are really into, built discipline, and train the persistence to reach the achievement. Admiration is good but we cannot be successful if we admire them for our whole life. Besides, we have to learn from them, let them be our models to make our dreams come true. 

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76802507837 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82228475204 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498432601881 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6066483484 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.05 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.95 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0673523119175 0.244688304435 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0220779932784 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381286243494 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.057537380728 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370424560896 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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