Children these days have plenty of kinds of entertainment which may help them unwind after studying at school. Television and video games are supposed to be more attractive to children than books. However, reading stories exerts many beneficial effects on brain development. I partly agree that reading books is better than watching TV or playing games.
Firstly, reading books can help them gain valuable knowledge, enjoy entertainment and reduce stress. When they are children, reading stories and fairy tales not only helps them read smoothly and increase their vocabulary, but also enormously helps them build an abundant imagination. When they are older, the favor of books that they nurtured when they were young may help them perceive much more precious knowledge. Furthermore, reading books was regarded as one of the most popular ways of entertaining when they had free time.While reading textbooks or specialized books can broaden their horizons, reading novels and funny stories can help them reduce stress when they are under a lot of pressure. Secondly, one of the perks of reading books is that it can exercise children's brains, improve their focus, and their memory. While reading, children are trained how to absorb new information and arrange it in a memorable way. Unlike exercise for muscles, reading is a workout for children's brains. While trying to interpret the written words, the brain is stimulated to focus, concentrate, and be intelligent. Research has shown that reading helps in brain development and makes kids smart.
On the other hand, apart from reading stories in books, watching television or playing video games also have their positive sides. For example, through media, kids can explore places, animals, or things that they couldn’t see otherwise. The pictures or images in books can be colorful, but it will never be as vivid as on screen. Furthermore, good role models and examples on TV can positively influence kids. Thousands of people’s jobs are determined when they saw it on TV as they were children. Images of models, flight attendants, teachers, or even firefighters, have a great impact on children's wishes of dream jobs. In terms of playing video games, it also improves their problem-solving skills. At the heart of every video game is a challenge. Some games, such as puzzles, mysteries, managing virtual cities, and empires, offer kids the chance to take on a problem and work to find a solution.
In conclusion, each one has its own perks. Reading stories can bring children many benefits, including obtaining valuable knowledge, reducing stress, exercising the brain, and improving focus and memory. On the other side of the spectrum, watching television moderately can bring them real and lively images of what they learn in books. Playing video games can even help them enhance their problem-solving skills. Three of them are the ways that exert desirable impacts on children's development. Parents are the only ones who can help them utilize and control the time they use in a way that supports their children the most.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...of entertaining when they had free time.While reading textbooks or specialized books ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 908, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a memorable way" with adverb for "memorable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...o absorb new information and arrange it in a memorable way. Unlike exercise for muscles, reading i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 498.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19277108434 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68856530759 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522088353414 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 506.74238477 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3156318655 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3571428571 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7857142857 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32142857143 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 8.67935871743 253% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237063042803 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715716650629 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748982155333 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171295532064 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066197702833 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...of entertaining when they had free time.While reading textbooks or specialized books ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 908, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a memorable way" with adverb for "memorable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...o absorb new information and arrange it in a memorable way. Unlike exercise for muscles, reading i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 498.0 315.596192385 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19277108434 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68856530759 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522088353414 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 506.74238477 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3156318655 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3571428571 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7857142857 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32142857143 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 8.67935871743 253% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237063042803 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715716650629 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748982155333 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171295532064 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066197702833 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.