Advertising may make people buy something they don’t need or cannot afford, but also, they can convey information to increase their life quality. What is your opinion?
Nowadays, whether advertising may make people buy something they do not need has attracted numerous controversies. Some people believe that advertising can make people buy something they do not afford, while others hold the view that they can convey information to increase their life expectancy. In my opinion, there is no relationship between advertising and life expectancy due to economic and cultural reasons.
First and foremost, it has been argued that the economic reason is why I think advertisement strategies can not increase mankind's life-span. Although potentially negative impacts of TV commercials must be taken into account. I still reckon that the existence of advertisements has in many ways enormously enriched people's lives. For example, a well-known American philosopher once said, " people are generally afraid of receiving any form of information from advertisements ." it is thus clearly shown that advertising improvements is not affected by living longer.
In addition, another factor that should be considered is the cultural reason. As far as society is concerned, the ultimate aim of conveying information is to provide people with affordability. For instance, a recent article published by The Economist reveals that 80% of people expect to live longer after purchasing an unaffordable product. Undoubtedly, this is a clear indication that luxury goods purchasing has a positive impact on getting human older.
In conclusion, I hold the view that advertisement developments can affect information for people's life-expectancy enhancement. To address this issue, the government and society should make a concerted effort to find solutions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 31.9359605911 75% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.75862068966 208% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1207.87684729 118% => OK
No of words: 252.0 242.827586207 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67063492063 5.00649968141 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26085942776 2.71678728327 120% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 139.433497537 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 379.143842365 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0399566661 50.4703680194 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.923076923 104.977214359 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.9669160288 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.25397266985 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374275419081 0.242375264174 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116333847631 0.0925447433944 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140396396154 0.071462118173 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21523566429 0.151781067708 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183667292929 0.0609392437508 301% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 12.6369458128 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 53.1260098522 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.9458128079 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 11.5310837438 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 55.0591133005 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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