A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree ordisagree?

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A competitive environment in school and university would bring excellence and need to be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or
disagree?

Nowadays there is a huge competition in every field including education systems, business world etc. Some people argue that it is good to have competitive environment in education systems and hence it need to be encouraged. I also agree with this statement and this essay will elaborate my opinions on above statement.

To begin with, few decades ago education system was completely different than now. It is a well known factor that, nowadays there is huge competition between students not only in schools but also in universities. Especially, in some countries which offer free education, this trend is increasing day by day. This is because students want to get high marks in advance level examinations so that they can educate freely in higher education institutions. I think this is good in some aspects. Firstly, this competition makes students to study hard. Otherwise it is difficult for them to get a class or merits. On the other hand, this competitive environment make students to do more home work like reading extra books related to their subjects, referring internet to search relevant things etc. Finally, as a result of competitive environment students left universities with a class and much knowledge that they will useful in future.

In contrast, this system has its own disadvantages also. Firstly this creates selfish students who like to study and complete tasks by their own and not interested in sharing knowledge with others. This is because the only thing that in his/her mind is to be first in the class. This is really not a good trend. These types of students cannot involve in corporate work, especially in office places.

To conclude based on the above factors I think that competitive environment is good but only to some extent. If not students become more selfish and the final target of educations systems will not be achieved.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, really, so, well, i think, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.5418719212 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 20.9802955665 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 31.9359605911 141% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 5.75862068966 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1207.87684729 130% => OK
No of words: 309.0 242.827586207 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06472491909 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78221553537 2.71678728327 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 139.433497537 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572815533981 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 379.143842365 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.6157635468 238% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 12.6551724138 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.5024630542 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6467057721 50.4703680194 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3684210526 104.977214359 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2631578947 20.9669160288 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 7.25397266985 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 6.9802955665 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135554535716 0.242375264174 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427417057153 0.0925447433944 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561291036818 0.071462118173 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960713431233 0.151781067708 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510354612315 0.0609392437508 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 12.6369458128 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.1260098522 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 11.5310837438 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32886699507 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 55.0591133005 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.3980295567 81% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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