It is important for school children to study music, art, and sports as it is for them to become literate and numerate. How far do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.
Recently, the phenomenon of studying music, art and sport and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many the matter of its importance is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that sports , music can create enormous entertainment and learning them can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
First and the foremost, learning sports and music or any art make the children more confident and also make them mentally and physically strong which can provide the society with some noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that merits of growing their capability under pressure as well as help find their inner strength which are inextricably bound up. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered children who are not good in study and not able to get high grades can settle their career into their passion like music, art or sports. Thus, beneficial ramifications of studying music, art and sports apparently can be seen.
On the flip side, for learning music and sports parents should be financially strong as it involves money to practice and taking classes. Addition to this, sometimes practices can cause serious physical injuries. As a tangible example, some risky sports like skydiving, bungee-jumping can cause negative impact on health if not learn properly. So it is recommended to learn these sports under the supervision of good guidance.
To conclude, while there are compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that merits of learning music, art or sports which help to develop an overall intellectual personality and help to settle their career and make them famous for their passions outweigh its demerits. Thus, the positive aspects of studying these should be considered.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, if, so, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 8.36945812808 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 5.94088669951 185% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 31.9359605911 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1207.87684729 136% => OK
No of words: 311.0 242.827586207 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27974276527 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86350537814 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 139.433497537 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585209003215 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 379.143842365 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2205444702 50.4703680194 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 104.977214359 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9166666667 20.9669160288 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.25397266985 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172088529147 0.242375264174 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648723741306 0.0925447433944 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344666256789 0.071462118173 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104475545896 0.151781067708 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225250495531 0.0609392437508 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 12.6369458128 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 11.5310837438 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.32886699507 115% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 55.0591133005 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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