In the past, it was a custom for a father to be the only bread earner for the family. Fathers would go out to work and earn money to fulfil the families’ daily needs and mothers would stay home to take care of the children. However, nowadays, it is not rare to find both parents going out to work. Whilst the additional income might bring benefits to everyone especially the children, there are a number of drawbacks that cannot be overlooked. This essay will confer whether or not it is necessary for both parents to go out to earn money for a living.
In some families, both parents are required to work not because of their own will, but because circumstances demand them to. As living cost and everything is getting more expensive in today’s competitive world, some families might not earn enough to cover their living cost if only one parent goes out to work. That being the case, there is nothing anyone can do to help. However, the benefit of the extra income for the children still remains unchanged. With more income, parents will be able to afford more new toys, the latest gadget, and even vacation abroad.
On the other hand, children might feel abandoned due to their parents’ never being there for them. It is also proven that children’s, whose parents are never at home, are more prone to behavioural problems. For instance, my friend, Elaine, whose parents is always working overnight and is never there for her when she needs them, has to battle with her insecurity of being unwanted every day, she, in turn, tries to seek the attention of her teachers by behaving badly in the class. From my example, you can see how parents’ absence can affect children in the long run.
As far as I am concerned, there is no need for both parents to be working unless it is really necessary. While additional income is benefiting for the children, the presence of a mother will be best for the children’s well-being in the long run.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...t be overlooked. This essay will confer whether or not it is necessary for both parents to go ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, really, so, still, well, while, as to, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 10.5418719212 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 6.10837438424 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 20.9802955665 110% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 31.9359605911 141% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.75862068966 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1630.0 1207.87684729 135% => OK
No of words: 345.0 242.827586207 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72463768116 5.00649968141 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 3.92707691288 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62088296481 2.71678728327 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 139.433497537 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553623188406 0.580463131201 95% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 379.143842365 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6551724138 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5256355106 50.4703680194 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.875 104.977214359 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5625 20.9669160288 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.25397266985 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211144391432 0.242375264174 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779853747797 0.0925447433944 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327037309824 0.071462118173 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13791879426 0.151781067708 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105673465751 0.0609392437508 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 12.6369458128 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.1260098522 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.5310837438 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32886699507 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 55.0591133005 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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