Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Advertisements have cloud every places even schools. While some individuals think that as public schools need extra funding so its good to advertise in school, others believe that it actually uses students as a confined audience for corporate sponsors. This essay will discuss the reasons why these advertisements uses children as a captive audience for sponsors.
Firstly, school is a place to study not to advertise. Students go to schools to learn and to get education and if the school will be drowning in ads, it will loose its real meaning by distracting the students. For example, every place is known for the service it deliver and if the schools will also indulge themselves into such money making bussines for extra income by placing adverts inside the campus of their schools then it will destroy their image among students. Thus, students will not consider the schools as pure place for education rather it will be regarded as a advertisement house.
Moreover, advertisements are always made in a particular way to target their audiences. When children in the schools will come across several adverts, they might get distracted, which is quite natural. An advert of fashionable high end brands in the school, for instance, will definately captivate the students and this way they will pay more attention to those catchy ads than on their studies. Hence, this way children are getting exploits for corporate sponsors.
This essay has argued that how by placing advertisements in schools students are getting distracted from their studies and also schools are ruining its name among children. In my opinion, children are really getting exploited by being the confined audiences for some corporate sponsors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Message: Did you mean 'delivers'?
Suggestion: delivers
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...education rather it will be regarded as a advertisement house. Moreover, adver...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, really, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.5418719212 104% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 5.94088669951 84% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 20.9802955665 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 31.9359605911 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 1207.87684729 120% => OK
No of words: 278.0 242.827586207 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20863309353 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71048357018 2.71678728327 100% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 139.433497537 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553956834532 0.580463131201 95% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 379.143842365 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8688902826 50.4703680194 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.384615385 104.977214359 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.9669160288 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.25397266985 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 6.9802955665 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353795731626 0.242375264174 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147261994305 0.0925447433944 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824808680268 0.071462118173 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248388493135 0.151781067708 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793762618561 0.0609392437508 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 12.6369458128 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.1260098522 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.5310837438 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32886699507 98% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 55.0591133005 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.5123152709 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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