Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.Choose which position you most de

There is no denying that the presence of advertisements have burgeoned to become one of the most important aspect in funding, especially for public schools. While there are many people think that it is a good idea to install some advertisement for school's financial benefit, others maintain it is not fair for the students as they are being used for this purpose.
This essay will discuss the reason why student might not be necessary the victim of sponsorship for the school funding.

There is nothing wrong on displaying a little bit of endorsement at a school as long as the products are related to students' needs. It is actually helps to provide students with the direction of where to obtain the items. For example, endorsing particular stationary tools that students might need will give them some information and save them some time on searching. In other words, as long as it is within the target audience and not as a form of forced marketing, spreading advertisements in school is in fact a good idea.

On the other hand, the content of the advertisement has to be filtered properly so that it does not introduce negative influence to the students. Students are less experience and prone to external influence as they require guidances of what content to take in. For example, putting a commercial display about cigarette at school is seriously a dreadful idea. In shorts, school has to reject the inappropriate advertisement that might potentially pose negative impacts.

This essay has discussed the reason why installing advertisements are acceptable as long as it is within the appropriate content and matches the needs. In my opinion, not only does it benefits school financially, it also help student to get their new tools.

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Average: 7.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 40, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... There is nothing wrong on displaying a little bit of endorsement at a school as long as t...
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Line 8, column 185, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'benefit'?
Suggestion: benefit
... needs. In my opinion, not only does it benefits school financially, it also help studen...
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Line 8, column 185, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'benefit'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: benefit
... needs. In my opinion, not only does it benefits school financially, it also help studen...
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Line 8, column 222, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...it benefits school financially, it also help student to get their new tools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, so, while, as to, for example, in fact, in short, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.5418719212 161% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 20.9802955665 105% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.75862068966 191% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1207.87684729 121% => OK
No of words: 291.0 242.827586207 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01718213058 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89965138886 2.71678728327 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 139.433497537 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53264604811 0.580463131201 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 379.143842365 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6306494608 50.4703680194 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.307692308 104.977214359 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.9669160288 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.25397266985 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269539849365 0.242375264174 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895692728591 0.0925447433944 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727273797012 0.071462118173 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149362321332 0.151781067708 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852338018518 0.0609392437508 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 12.6369458128 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.1260098522 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.9458128079 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 11.5310837438 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32886699507 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 55.0591133005 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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