Even at the dawn of industrialization, the workforce has been the foundation of businesses and industries to further their visions and goals. The increasing need of these businesses are putting a heavy burden for employees to spend more time at work. While these laborers work over time, the lose valuable and precious time for their personal and family lives. This is becoming a widespread problem that is sparking a heated and complicated discussions about the topic. This essay will discuss the issues that could arise from spending an increasing number of hours working and lesser time for self and family.
Firstly, doing more overtime will cause health problems. Studies show that people who work for more than 8 hours a day are more prone to heart diseases. An example is the statistical evidence seen in a Japanese company that forced their employees to render at least 10 hours of work everyday and decrease their rest days to one every two weeks. They call this phenomenon "death by work" and it's causing a controversy not only in Japan but also in the rest of the world. Therefore, health problems and even worse, death can arise from working too much.
Secondly, spending less time for one's self and family will cause mental health problems. Because we heavily rely on our family for emotional support, spending less time with them can create mental health issues such as depression and anxiety. For example, more Korean fresh recruits are committing suicide than ever before. A study about them show that as they spend most of their time at work, employees are becoming sad, depressed, and even worse, suicidal. Thus, without sufficient time for self and family, employees suffer more with mental health issues.
In conclusion, this essay discussed how rendering more time at work can create a myriad of issues such as diseases and depression. In my opinion, governments and companies should look into how we can maintain the productivity in the workplace while allowing employees to have work and life balance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ees to render at least 10 hours of work everyday and decrease their rest days to one eve...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...henomenon 'death by work' and its causing a controversy not only in Japan...
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Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ch. Secondly, spending less time for ones self and family will cause mental healt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 8.36945812808 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 5.94088669951 101% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 20.9802955665 119% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 31.9359605911 116% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1207.87684729 141% => OK
No of words: 337.0 242.827586207 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06528189911 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 3.92707691288 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58602915253 2.71678728327 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 139.433497537 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554896142433 0.580463131201 96% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 379.143842365 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6551724138 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7640909967 50.4703680194 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.411764706 104.977214359 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.9669160288 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 7.25397266985 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 6.9802955665 43% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 2.75862068966 362% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235067261251 0.242375264174 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839539432567 0.0925447433944 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607500960913 0.071462118173 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14867443111 0.151781067708 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718038413849 0.0609392437508 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 12.6369458128 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 11.5310837438 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32886699507 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 55.0591133005 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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