In some countries children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Success always smiles with those who make an effort to achieve their goals. In some nations, educating children to reach the specific target unless they do not try hard enough is extremely important. This method brings a lot of benefits such as arising awareness, motivating, or forming good characters. However, there are several downsides that people must take into account.
The message of encouraging children to make enough effort whenever achieving success has lots of advantages. First of all, children can advance their awareness about target progression. For example, if they want to get an A mark in the exam, they have to practice and study carefully from easy tasks to difficult ones. During the studying progression, students also gain useful experiences and form good character such as patience, self-discipline, responsibility, which are required to be a successful person in the future. In addition, failure always exists in all situations, hence, while failure is considered as not attempting enough, the feeling of disappointment and depression is reduced. Instead, this experience becomes a motivation that helps children overcome whatever hardship is.
However, there are some negative influences that adults must take into consideration whenever teaching and motivating children to reach the targets. Some students spend the most time studying and refuse other activities such as playing sports. This problem will lead to the reverse of study-recreation balance. Besides, children may be misled if they have the wrong initial perspective that putting too much effort into doing over-touch targets.
In conclusion, teaching children how to achieve any goals by making enough effort will have positive impacts on children's development. Yet not everything is perfect, losing the balance between study and entertainment and misguiding are the adversities children have to encounter.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 219, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
...ssion. For example, if they want to get an A mark in the exam, they have to practice...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60763888889 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98830466913 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642361111111 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5016145486 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.9375 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280194408834 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847336715779 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072793930754 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168282061839 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232108041109 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.96 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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