Government should reduce their investment in arts, music and painting. Agree or disagree?
Recently, the phenomenon of putting the investment in art and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of financial aid for developing the art value is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined that the study of supporting the art sector in terms of investing money can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
From a social standpoint, the financial aid in art and museum provide the society with some noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that merits of encouraging youth to art, as well as introducing music in the society are inextricably bound up, according to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered the influence of investing money in art on promoting the art value. Thus beneficial ramifications of both surviving the cultural value and preserve the work arts apparently can be seen.
Within the realm of art, considering the money for art and painting might increase the consequences of persuading the people to be interested in art. Moreover, fundamental aspects of the financial aid in setting up the art gallery could relate to this reality that the demerits of wasting money pertain to retrieving the art. As a tangible example, some scientific research undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that the downside of reducing the investment in art is correlated negatively to lack of culture.
To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the benefits of investing in art sectors such as music and painting far outweigh its drawbacks. Not only do the advantages of preserving the national art prove the significance of the masterpiece, but also pinpoint social implications.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 20.9802955665 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 31.9359605911 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1207.87684729 133% => OK
No of words: 306.0 242.827586207 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23202614379 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1187721487 2.71678728327 115% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 139.433497537 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571895424837 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 379.143842365 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6551724138 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.5024630542 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.585608312 50.4703680194 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.1 104.977214359 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6 20.9669160288 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 7.25397266985 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.061432408846 0.242375264174 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295187297556 0.0925447433944 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032213581561 0.071462118173 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.043824281829 0.151781067708 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00858764665608 0.0609392437508 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 12.6369458128 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 53.1260098522 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.9458128079 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 11.5310837438 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.18 8.32886699507 122% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 55.0591133005 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.3980295567 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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